Here's a link to a recent Book Blogger review of "The Unfortunate Tale of Little Mary Jenkins": http://belleofthelibrary.wordpress.com/2013/01/30/the-unfortunate-tale-of-little-mary-jenkins/
A comment I liked is: "What I did like was the way the characters spoke up during the ghost story. That felt really real to me, more so than if someone were to tell the story uninterrupted. How often does that honestly happen? Not with my friends or family, I can tell you that. So I liked that."
A comment I need to consider as I continue writing: "...I felt that the characterization was really rushed. I wanted more “show-not-tell.”
Take a gander and let me know if you agree, disagree or something in-between.